Flash Friday – Too Far Back

“This is it! This is really it!” Grayvey said to no one in particular.  Eagerly, he spun the dial back randomly.  “One hundred and forty thousand years should be enough for a start,” he mused.  Stepping into his patented “Temporal Redistribution Device” (“time machine” was so passé), he rubbed his hands in excitement at the thought of seeing the world before human history.

And then he was standing in a room.  Gray walls surrounded him.  Three beings, in appearance as men, sat in chairs and looked on him without surprise.  “You really are not supposed to be here,” said the one in the middle.  And Grayvey was no more.

 

FLASH! It’s Flash Friday, the day when Seeking New Earth authors write short stories up to 1000 words (“flash fiction”) or 110 words (“microfiction”). Both are sure to invigorate the imagination and stimulate the synapses. Did you like what you read? Want to explore the story some more? Or maybe you want to try your own hand at some flash fiction? Leave us a comment below!  If you’d like to read more, search “flash fiction” in the search bar above.

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10 responses to “Flash Friday – Too Far Back

  1. Not only microfiction, not only Science microfiction, but Christian science microfiction?! Well done! You tell enough about the good doctor in the little bit we get to know him, and the room he finds himself in tells us enough. I am a little curious though: Why is he “no more” and not simply sent back home?

    • Because no sinner can look on God and live? I don’t have a better answer than that, other than the fact that word count made it really hard to do anything else with it.

  2. Now that was fun.
    I’m with Jon – Christian science microfiction FTW. Awesome.
    And Microfiction in general = One more reason to love Fridays.

  3. I’m gonna call it Science-Christian microfiction. Christian Science is already taken, and not something we’re associated with here 😉

    SOOOO COOOL to think about what actually WOULD happen. I didn’t get the “and he was no more part” either until you explained it, and it makes perfect sense.

  4. I’m having trouble with the concept of titling microfiction in general. How much of a hint do you give to the overall story? What role does the title play: Hook or hint? Both? Ah, well.

    I am thinking now that I could have gone a different way and kept it short. Thinking about Grayvey saying something kind of silly like, “We’ve all been wrong…” But that’s too much of a… I dunno, it just feels too obvious.

    • Depending the route you want to go, you could say, “You stopped existing a long time ago!” Meh.

      And I try to make my titles both hooks and hints. Especially in microfiction, the title is a part of the story.

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